Category: Writers Block
There on your cheek, sliding down your face
Lingering for awhile on your jaw line then
Trekking, making slow the journey
Down, down, slower yet going down
Down yet further still
Completely down
Till at length that tear drop journey
Going down thy neck on
So soft the skin,
More tender than that of Tralee’s finest bloom
Then it is at last that outward flow ceases
Comes it seems to a halting stop
Beyond skin, flesh, muscle, and sinew
Going beyond bone and morrow
Reaching to that utmost place within
Hidden in heart so deep, now the drops of tears
Evaporated, rather going into the misty shadowlands within
With new storm clouds arising on the furrowed brow
So manied the times when not drops tears for rather
Sweat drops from hard tedious labour bestowed
When life confronts, giving deepest challenges
Then it is when the thoroughly toughened goes beyond
What in a previous time had been the outer reaches
Venturing rather to that destination that few experience
At length these moistured drops that fell
Whether from drops of tears ~
Whether from toiling drops of sweat
Hath come to a time when with inner person meshed
Given transformation
Diamonds now contained within
~*Thunderous MidNight*~
it was pretty good, i liked everything, but i dont think you had to say down so much, it kind of ruined the beginning, in my oppinion at least
First up, ThankYou for stopping by to read and then secondally to take the time to share of your opinions with me.
hmm, guess it started out as a bit of a downer didn't it?
~*Thunderous MidNight*~
hi there,
i liked it alot,but it was kind of too long ,and could be shorten a bit.
frosted flakes
hmm, name frosted flakes fits you well
you related to Frosty The Snowman by any chance?
Certainly not hot cream of wheat are you?
Lightning bolt Strikes,
~*Thunderous MidNight*~
(must admit I like your honesty)